I've done a little more revision now, but it's still basically the same poem. I wish I had the copy I submitted to Wilbur, with his comments; it may be in a box somewhere in my brother's attic. I share it because I think one can sense the influence of Wilbur, and I can feel the awkwardness with which I approach rhyme and particularly meter. In The Wake has never appeared in public before...
IN THE WAKE
The funeral
procession plodded by
in single-file cars,
headlights
struggling to be seen
against the
morning sun.
In front the hearse,
the limousines,
behind them black
gave way
to cars in motley
disarray
until the line was
done.
And down the road a
flower-painted
old Volkswagen van,
just-married signs and
tied-on shoes,
tin cans and blaring
horn,
Chugged past like
dawn's cacophony.
I stopped and looked
both ways to view
Their circling my boundaries
That sunny summer
morn.
Sept-Oct 1970, Middletown
3 comments :
I like this. A thoughtful and meditative approach to this life, its beauty and contradictions, the passing of time, convergence of events, the melancholic nature of our condition... life, death, happiness. There’s atmosphere, sound, colour, humour... your essentially sunny nature shines through (whether you like it or not). Interested to know what Wilbur would have commented...
Thank you...I may have to dig through the boxes to find out...
You should! A good revisiting in this season
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